future lands-my story

today (term 4) i was making a story called future lands if you find any mistakes in it feel free to put what i got wrong in the comments. In Room 18, we are learning how to write narrative stories.

 now let the story beagen! Max and Simon opened the door inside it was a room with another door should we enter? Asked siamon i guess we should said max back they opened the door and walked in it was a empty grass land whit a few trees they turned arount the door was not therethere was a gaint tree house hey look said siman it was a big mountai made out of ice strange said max le’s ckeck out the tree house said max i agree said simanthe walkedto the tree house but next the the tree house was a lake next to the lake was a hole in the ground should we ho in asked max umm.. Ahh… o..ok… lucky they are same leadars said max ummmm… grae...te...greate said siman he was lookink scared the climb down the ladder int o the hole wow said siman it was a cave full of water they where standing on rocks it was a gaint rivver whit lot’s of islands but it was all full of rubbish look a pathway! Said max but the had to go through the water look a boat said siman le’g get in they got in thr entered the pathway theislands started to deisapper look said siman a littale island! It was small it almost blokking the way the island wasn’t a normal island it had a yellow sword on it siman jumped out of the boat and into the water is a graet swimming expert he went on the island and piiked up the sword and jumped on the boat the sword was his then the path finneshed it was a gaint city underwater cool let's call this place beaotupia! Said max the end ! i am still adiing it so wate for the full story bye!